First Writing Assigment

First Writing Assigment

My name is Noa. I'm 15 years old. I study at Kugel High School. I study at the science class. I study biology, chemistry and computers. My favorite subjects is (are) biology and literature. This year is very difficult, because it's the first year of high school and we are under a lot of pressure and the teachers demand too much from us.

(I need to see a gap between the different paragraph. I tried to divide your work into seperate paragraphs, so you can see what I mean by "structure")

In my spare time, I like to surf on the Internet, talk with friends on the MSN messenger. Sometimes I read a book or write. In addition, I like to download and watch Japanese Animation, because I find it very interesting. I know Japanese a little and I like it.

I have a dog. Her name is Yuki, snow in Japanese. Her color is white, and that's why we named her "Yuki". Yuki is a Labrador and she is very friendly, cute and smart. I often take Yuki for walks and I enjoy playing with her. We adopted Yuki from the S.P.C.A (The society of protection of animals) a year ago, in September, and we don't regret it.

This year, I hope to get better grades in school and do my best. In addition, I want to improve my English and writing, and this blog is the beginning for this. I want to keep writing here in the future, and hope you will enjoy reading about me.

I really enjoyed reading your essay. It's very clear, well-organized and interesting.

Daphna.

(That's better, Noa)