December, 20th, 2008
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Dear Linoy,
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Hi, how are you? I hope everything is fine with you. I'm fine, I'm sorry I haven't written for a long time, I was busy with my school tests. (You can't start telling your story so quickly, you need to relate it to something) I would like to tell you about a surprising situation, that has happened to me.
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It was last summer, when I went on a Hatzav youth movement seminar. The seminar was five days and during those five days we learned how to guide young children. On the fourth night, at 3 am, the guides woke us up and told us that someone had done a terrible thing and therefore, we had to be punished and return home. Everybody was scared. At first, we started asking each other who had done something which was against the rules. Then, the guides started to question us who had done it. We didn't understand what they wanted from us, however, we understood something wrong was done.
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Finally, the guides took us outside and we saw that they were laughing and we understood they played a trick on us and fooled us. We started laughing too and we felt both surprised and relieved that nothing serious had happened. Sometimes we remember this incident and we burst (out) laughing how easily the guides fooled us.
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Well, it's getting late and I have to finish my letter. I hope next time I will send you some pictures from this seminar.
I look forward to getting your letter soon.
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Miss you,
Noa.
Very good, Noa. However, please remember to leave a blank between your paragraphs.
Daphna.
2 comments:
Hello Noa.
The letter was very impressive. The letter has 4 paragraphs, you have a date and the letter's structe is very good. I very enjoyed reading the letter, it was clear and made me laugh a little bit. I esspecially liked the part when the guides laugh at you, it was funny and while i was reading it, it made me curious why they did it until i found out that they just laughed at you. It was very nice noa, i really liked it.
Ridle me this, is it really that easy to fool you, becuase I really don't get what you're trying to tell me. It would be nice if you added some more details so that poeple that don't know you that well can also understand your story. Besides that everything was great. good job!
from me
the Ridler
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