Young Drivers And Accidents

(The) Modern car is one of the most important inventions of the 21st century. Since it was invented, the car has become a popular means of transportation . However, in order to drive you must learn how to drive and pass a test to get a driving license. In our country, Israel, you may get a driving license at the age of 17. However, Young drivers are involved in a lot of accidents. Therefore, an organization of accident victims has recently proposed that the age of getting a license should be raised to 19. In my opinion, this proposal will help decrease the rate of road accidents.

To begin with, there are many advantages of(ww.) this law. At age 17, many of the drivers give in to peer group pressure. Therefore, it is much easier to convince them to drive after drinking alcohol or drive beyond the speed limit. Moreover, at 19, young drivers are usually more responsible than drivers, who are 17 years old(why is that?). Another argument is that a person has to be eighteen in order to vote in (the) elections, so why may he get a driving license earlier? Is it(?) really less important than driving(ww. - don't you mean - voting?)?

In my point of view, the Israeli government should increase the awareness of ways to prevent(phr.) car accidents among young drivers. If young drivers realize what the consequences of their reckless driving are, they will be afraid to act like that in the future. Furthermore, the police should enforce the laws routinely and punish people who disobey traffic laws severely. If those reckless and dangerous drivers are not afraid of the dangers of their driving, maybe they will care about their money.

To conclude, in the(מיותר) light of (the) above, I strongly believe that this law is necessary in order to reduce the rate of car accidents. Without it, we won't (be able to) prevent future accidents.

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Daphna

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